Transitions and Flow Sentence Structure Clarity writing homework help

Transitions and Flow, Sentence Structure/Clarity , Grammar/Punctuation check for my essay.

Suggestion for further development for my essay. 

Please criticize my essay and suggest me how can I develop this essay more. 

I will be really appreciated with your opinion whether my work is compelling enough. But first priority is checking grammar and flow. 

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